--> new track from 2 of my boyz...pretty tight.

[shakez]

chek dis track...they sound pretty nice...Ehmon and Zion. they brothers btw. drop some comments/feedback/tips...ill be sure to pass em on.


props for replies.

Pop Ya Collar - Ehmon and Zion


http://www.yousendit.com/transfer.php?action=download&ufid=408D9B44164EEE77

[D. Aliff]

i dont really like the beat.....i dont like how the strings sound and it kinda sounds incomplete.....

1st verse: the rhymes r really simple........mostly a one syllable rhyme scheme........dude needs more multis and metaphores and all that good shit.......and he needs more emotion.........cuz it sounds to me like he's reading it off a page instead of actually rapping it.......

chrous: i think its dumb......im sorry....it sounds like a gimmick type hook to me and i just plain dont like it.....it should be called 'slide'.......

2nd verse: alot more complex rhyme scheme than the 1st guy.....but alot of his shit didnt have n e thing to do with 'popping ur collar' or n e thing related to that........there were a couple lines in there about killing folks.........dont really fit......

the part where they spell their names is dumb to me......i cant stand when people do that......its not just ur friends......

overall i say its not that great of a song.....i feel like the beat is missing something to give it that 'POW!!!' factor that a club song needs.......and im assuming its a club song since thats what the concept of the song was........and the first guy's lyrics weren't that great......they were really predicatble.......2nd guy i thought got off subject a little too much.......

[354]

Speed up the beat.

Turn the lyrics up.

The name-spelling is really tacky.

As said above, 2nd verse is much better, but off-topic.

Chorus gets catchy, but didn`t grow on me.

Basically what daliff said.

[Wyte]

i aint feelin the beat... it sounds a bit too un-professional... check some of mine that i did and the beats sound. www.myspace.com/cwyte but yeah the lyrics is hott but the beat needs to be re-done. cuz it sounds too amature.


oh and feel free 2 add my myspace. lol

[Maurice00]

if I hadnt read the other reviews before listening, I would've approached it differently. But knowing what I was getting into made the experience a lot different for me. And I just wanna say congratz on the track, but it needs a lot of work. Everything the peeps above said, I share those EXACT sentiments. And on top of that...this isn't the mixed version right? Cuz I was kinda aggravated everything being on the center channel. My ears was beggin for some noise! But u kno, its not to worry, ya boyz got plenty of time to patch it up and make it right, and I wish the most for them. Just tell them I said work on it, and work hard. Songs dont happen overnight...